Assignment Fifteen.

conversation.

Rewrite The Conversation. 

In our Mighty Writers classes we have been focusing on various writing techniques. Last week our instructor Kala gave us examples of dialogue, details, setting, character, and moral. The class was instructed to rewrite these examples and fill in the blanks left by the author. This is a great exercise to do in the classroom and students are even more engaged when you add their name into the equation. This exercise allowed the girls to get creative and fill their papers with details that they would not have considered before. Here are some examples of possible examples and responses. The italicized text is what needs to be elaborated on.

Dialogue:
Kala expressed to Corey she was mad about what happened.
“WHAT WERE YOU THINKING?!” Kala screeched as she threw the book at Corey.

Corey expresses sadness and remorse
Sobbing, “I didn’t know it was going to turn out like this!” Corey tried to defend herself . She closed the book and tried to hand it back to her friend.  “Tell me how I can fix this. I can fix this.”

Kala won’t forgive her unless she does:
“There is no way we can get past this. You can’t take it back… It’s already out there for the world to see…. Unless… The only way I will forgive you is if you buy every single copy off the shelves. “

Details:
Madison walked outside he big nice house and saw a nice forest. It was pretty. She felt good.
Madison strolled down the marble stairs of her newly purchased brownstone home in New York City. She looked out onto Central Park, which was just a few blocks away. She felt the breeze on her cheeks and smelled the freshly cut grass and newly blooming trees.  It was going to be a fantastic day.

Setting:
Josephine lived in a neighborhood in Philadelphia. It was very… She liked that it was…
Josephine lived in a neighborhood in Fishtown. It was very grimy, but full of character. She liked that it was full of strangers awake at all hours. She liked that there were always cats on the sidewalk and trash on the ground. It meant that there was room for improvement, a chance for things to get better.

The neighborhood was filled with people who…
The neighborhood was filled with people who were Irish, proud, and drunk.

Characters:
Cyani was the antagonist in Brookes story because…
Cyani was the antagonist in Brookes story because she threw her lunch tray at a girl in her class. Mashed potatoes and barbeque chicken dripped from the girls uniform as Cyani cackled with a smile on her face. 

Tori was the protagonist in Brookes story because…
Tori was the protagonist in Brookes story because she was the first to get up and help the girl to clean up her clothes. She walked her to the nurses office and scolded her sister. Tori always is cleaning up after his sister.

Moral: 
After Tytianna spent time with the girl next door who… she learned…
After Tytianna  spent time with the girl next door who was blind she learned that life isn’t always about what you see with your eyes. It’s about conversations, what you share with others. It’s about building a life, what you can build with your hands and your mind.

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